When composing a narrative essay, you have to tell a story. In telling a story, it’s always more effective and engaging to tell the story in recreated scenes. In scenes, you’ll have people, and those people have to talk. Writing a scene where people talk to each other sounds simple, however, writing dialogue can be complicated. Do you include author tags, like he said/she said? If not, how can you tell who is speaking? If more than one person is speaking, how do you format the interchange between two people? How do you format the interchange between three or four people? What if you’re just talking to yourself? (I talk to myself all the time, but I wouldn’t want to put it in quotes!) Is talking to yourself considered dialogue? Are you confused yet?
Formatting with Speaker Tags
When beginning with the speaker tag:
John said, “I’ll call you tomorrow.”
Note that in this example, a comma is placed after the speaker tag. The first word in the dialogue is treated like the beginning of a sentence, so the first word is capitalized. The quote is ended with a period which is placed inside the quotation marks.
When the quotation ends with speaker tag:
“I’ll call you tomorrow,” John said.
Here, use a capital letter to indicate the beginning of a sentence of the quotation. A comma is placed at the end of the quoted dialogue, inside the quotation mark, before the speaker tag. A period completes the sentence, but after the speaker tag.
When the dialogue tag is placed in the middle:
“I’ll call you,” John said, “tomorrow.”
In this example, a capital letter begins the quoted sentence. A comma is used inside the quotation mark preceding the speaker tag, and again after the tag, before the quotation mark that completes the quote. A lower case letter indicates the second part of the quotation is a continuation of the first part of the quotation.
When the speaker tag separates two complete quoted sentences:
“I’ll call you tomorrow,” John said. “Have a nice day.”
A capital letter indicates the beginning of the sentence, and a comma ends the quoted sentence before the speaker tag, followed by a period after the tag. The quoted sentence after the tag is again capitalized just as any sentence would be.
Note that the second part of the quote remains on the same line. This indicates that the same person is speaking. If a different person was speaking, the second piece of quoted material, “Have a nice day,” would go to a new line/paragraph.
Formatting Two (or more) Speakers
When two or more people are speaking, each line of dialogue must go to a new line or paragraph. It’s a new “paragraph” because each time a new person speaks, the line must be indented.
“I’ll call you tomorrow,” John said. “Have a nice day.”
“But I thought you might stay,” Diane said.
“I can’t. I have to go.”
“I wish you wouldn’t.”
“Mom! I need a drink of water!” Diane’s daughter yelled from her bedroom.
Even though the lines are short, they each must begin on a new line. Note that two exchanges have no speaker tags. In this example, it is clear who is speaking, as each person’s name has been given previously, and the order of exchange established. Only drop the tags when it is clearly evident who the speaker is.
In the final quoted dialogue, notice that the quote ends with an exclamation point. The exclamation point (to indicate yelling) is placed inside the quotation mark, and no other punctuation is used until the end of the tag.
In this example, if the tag did not happen to include a proper name, you would not capitalize the first word, as in the following example:
“Mom! I need a drink of water!” her daughter yelled from her bedroom.
Even though the quote ended with an exclamation mark, the tag is not capitalized, as it is not a complete sentence. If it were a complete sentence, it would be capitalized, as in the example below:
“Mom! I need a drink of water!” The young daughter, tucked in her bed, never went to bed without at least one request for water.
Also note in this example that the tag remains on the same line as the dialogue, as the “action” described in the speaker tag is related to the speaker who has been quoted on the same line. If any action needs to be described of John or Diane, that action would be placed on a new line.
Even though we’ve all spent a lifetime reading, until we actually have to write dialogue, we don’t often realize the intricacies involved. How do you decide where to place a dialogue tag? That’s often a stylistic choice, and not necessarily any hard and fast rule. I often incorporate the tag where it seems least intrusive. A speaker tag, when necessary, should be as “invisible” as possible so as not to detract from a smooth reading.
Next week, we’ll delve further into writing dialogue, and discuss the secrets to effective dialogue.
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There are two types of dialogue: direct and indirect
Direct dialogue is speech using the character’s exact words. In this case, quotation marks are used.
Indirect dialogue is a second-hand report of something that was said or written but NOT the exact words in their original form.
When writing a narrative essay, you are telling a story. That story can become confusing for the reader, though, when dialogue is added, unless it’s very clear who is doing the talking. Knowing how to quote someone in an essay can help your reader more easily follow the flow and action of the story.
Let’s focus on the writing of direct dialogue by looking at some narrative essay example sentences.
There are some rules to follow when writing direct dialogue in your narratives:
Rule #1: Use quotation marks to indicate the words that are spoken by the characters.
Example: “Help me!” exclaimed the little girl.
Rule #2: Always begin a new paragraph when the speaker changes.
“I am coming home,” Sue announced. “I am really tired and can’t work anymore.”
“Okay, I think you should do that,” her husband agreed.
Rule #3: Make sure the reader knows who is doing the talking.
Rule #4: Use correct punctuation marks and capitalization.
“May I buy a new pair of shoes?” Lauren asked her mom.
Note that the quotation marks are outside the end punctuation of the quote; the rest of the sentence has its own end punctuation.
If the quote is not a question or exclamation, use a comma and not a period before the second quotation marks.
“I bought a new jacket yesterday,” Tammy said.
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